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15th Jul 2015, 12:01 PM
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Rd Ashes 15th Jul 2015, 12:16 PM edit delete
Rd Ashes
Well, you've been told, Gharen.
:-|

Sometimes his big mouth gets him in trouble.
:-(
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MadJak91 15th Jul 2015, 12:15 PM edit delete reply
MadJak91
The one situation when you should disobey your boss.
Or maybe not :<
Rd Ashes 15th Jul 2015, 12:24 PM edit delete reply
Rd Ashes
Really, I don't think it's as doom and gloom as you might think.
We'll see more of Selena in the next… million… scenes.
I'd love to hear your take on this girl as I develop her.

Now I've gotta go draw a million scenes... ;-)
MadJak91 15th Jul 2015, 12:43 PM edit delete reply
MadJak91
You authors always say that and then it is a million scenes of suffering :<
Yip yop! I am always here but start cranking out those pages first ;-D
Rd Ashes 15th Jul 2015, 12:46 PM edit delete reply
Rd Ashes
pppffffttt, she'll be happy in scene 987,674!

Geeze, what do you expect? Rainbows and unicorns?!
;-)

(OMG I'm laughing at my own joke)
MadJak91 15th Jul 2015, 12:58 PM edit delete reply
MadJak91
I googled the number in hopes it is something special but alas.
So I will go with scene 65535 then.

You got me there. It took me few thousand milliseconds to realize what you meant.
Well played :D
I laugh at my own jokes all the time because no one gets them. People then laugh at that fact so it is a win!
Rd Ashes 15th Jul 2015, 12:25 PM edit delete reply
Rd Ashes
PS I don't think disobeying Khor-eth goes over well for anyone. Ever.
The Cloaked One 21st Jul 2015, 11:15 PM edit delete reply
Saw your post looking for a critique, I thought I'd try my hand at it. I'm focusing primarily on what I think could be done differently (being an amateur myself, some of it will simply boil down to differences in style)

First off, awesome warning page. :D

I like your shading style. I would suggest that you add more color to your comic. There's comics that work amazing in greyscale, but this comic feels that color would add a new layer to it.

Second, I would suggest stronger contrast. The greys are too close to each other at places that things become a bit muddy.

On the writing end, things are going a bit too fast. Good pacing is great, but the moment that stands out most to me is where the two men talking the second goes 'i hope you know it means a lot to me...' and the following page says 'are you sure about...' He seems to switch character rolls on a dime here. Maybe I'm too picky.

I hope this helps. Making comics is hard work, good to see you working away at it. Good luck!
Rd Ashes 22nd Jul 2015, 9:08 PM edit delete reply
Rd Ashes
Oh, hi.
First off, thanks for taking the time to look over my comic and give your opinion.
I appreciate it.

I wish I had the time to do this comic in full colour, but I'd really like to finish it sometime before I die. ;-)
On the up side there is more and more colour as we see more "Line" members make it into the story.
I almost have a colour coding thing going on.

I kind of feel the same way about the greyscale not having enough contrast.
Some pages, especially the ones coming up, will have much more contrast.
I'll definitely keep it in my mind as I create future pages.

If I can ask you to do me a little favour, could I have your take on what the dynamic is between these two guys that are talking?
I mean, what is their relationship? Do they like each other? What went on during this interaction between them?

It really helps me to know what readers are understanding about what's going on. That way I can try to better steer them in the right direction.

If you wouldn't mind responding by private message, or even in the forum where I asked for a critique, if it was a thread that I created.
I don't want this comment section to get too long!

Thanks again!